Comments on: VA: Battle at the Bus Stop http://www.violentacrestalk.com/va-battle-at-the-bus-stop/ violentacres.com feedback site Mon, 01 Dec 2008 19:37:56 +0000 http://wordpress.org/?v=2.5 By: Lola http://www.violentacrestalk.com/va-battle-at-the-bus-stop/#comment-9661 Lola Thu, 07 Feb 2008 02:52:33 +0000 http://www.violentacrestalk.com/va-battle-at-the-bus-stop/#comment-9661 I don't know. It doesn't sound real for me. A girl so young having all these analytics toughts and reactions. I'm not saying kids aren't smart - but they don't often analyze behaviours or feelings like V tells here. Yeah, I know my English sucks, but that's my opinion. I don’t know. It doesn’t sound real for me. A girl so young having all these analytics toughts and reactions.
I’m not saying kids aren’t smart - but they don’t often analyze behaviours or feelings like V tells here.

Yeah, I know my English sucks, but that’s my opinion.

]]> By: John http://www.violentacrestalk.com/va-battle-at-the-bus-stop/#comment-9658 John Thu, 07 Feb 2008 01:04:17 +0000 http://www.violentacrestalk.com/va-battle-at-the-bus-stop/#comment-9658 I like this writing style. It looks like a script for a movie, or something. V should try more of these. I like this writing style. It looks like a script for a movie, or something. V should try more of these.

]]> By: Davo http://www.violentacrestalk.com/va-battle-at-the-bus-stop/#comment-9656 Davo Wed, 06 Feb 2008 23:16:40 +0000 http://www.violentacrestalk.com/va-battle-at-the-bus-stop/#comment-9656 Also an odd use of the word 'connotation', and a seeming lack of any real conclusion. Also an odd use of the word ‘connotation’, and a seeming lack of any real conclusion.

]]> By: Chelsey http://www.violentacrestalk.com/va-battle-at-the-bus-stop/#comment-9652 Chelsey Wed, 06 Feb 2008 19:43:42 +0000 http://www.violentacrestalk.com/va-battle-at-the-bus-stop/#comment-9652 Yeah, V is trying to be a ~good writer~ and it just doesn't work. I prefer her usual style of story-telling. Yeah, V is trying to be a ~good writer~ and it just doesn’t work.

I prefer her usual style of story-telling.

]]> By: Xin http://www.violentacrestalk.com/va-battle-at-the-bus-stop/#comment-9647 Xin Wed, 06 Feb 2008 18:19:37 +0000 http://www.violentacrestalk.com/va-battle-at-the-bus-stop/#comment-9647 I found the constant visual references, and colors mentioned to be a distraction from the story. In other words, they could've been left out. I found the constant visual references, and colors mentioned to be a distraction from the story. In other words, they could’ve been left out.

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